<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">詩(shī)會(huì):中華慈善詩(shī)會(huì)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">校長(zhǎng):陌上花開(kāi)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">班主任:愛(ài)明、黃金歲月、</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">編輯審核:愛(ài)明 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作者:律61班學(xué)員</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">(本篇各位作者已經(jīng)授權(quán)<span class="ql-cursor">?</span>)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">要求:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1,不犯題字。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2,離形得似。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3,對(duì)仗工穩(wěn)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4,七言成聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5,不許疊字。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6,形成意聯(lián)。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1. 愛(ài)明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">世情幾變不容覆;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">故國(guó)重歸空自貪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):采用隱字化句法(取自蘇軾詩(shī)句“世道如弈棋,變化不容覆?!崩铎稀蹲右垢琛贰肮蕠?guó)夢(mèng)重歸,覺(jué)來(lái)雙淚垂。”)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天作界盤星布子;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">身臨玉闕意凌云。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):以名聯(lián)化用對(duì)神話夢(mèng)境,比喻切題。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2. 如水人生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河漢界千年戰(zhàn);</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">明月清風(fēng)一枕眠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):本句自對(duì)運(yùn)用得當(dāng)!詞工意美!贊!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3.洛兮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春秋楚漢盤中落;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日月星辰枕上書。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):本句自對(duì)運(yùn)用得當(dāng),構(gòu)思巧妙!贊!</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">4. 竹林聽(tīng)雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">胸中黑白烽煙起;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枕上虛實(shí)意象來(lái)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):對(duì)仗工穩(wěn),語(yǔ)淺意深!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">5.瓊之島</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黃粱未熟猶經(jīng)世;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">石室閑觀已爛柯。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):用黃粱美夢(mèng)和圍棋爛柯的著名典故成聯(lián),貼切、工穩(wěn)!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">6.春江</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古寺幽居逢對(duì)手;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">空山獨(dú)臥見(jiàn)周公。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):取成語(yǔ) 棋逢對(duì)手、夢(mèng)見(jiàn)周公成聯(lián),意境圓融,質(zhì)樸,有山居聯(lián)的味道!</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">7. 全興</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三局紋枰爭(zhēng)地界;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雙休虛幻到天河。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):白描手法直入主題,言之有物,貼切!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">8. 歲月如歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚漢紛爭(zhēng)拼圣手;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">盧生富貴止黃梁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):臨文觸機(jī),用典靈活!如果上聯(lián)也用典,就更棒了!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">9.如夢(mèng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">方寸運(yùn)籌千古業(yè);</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">須臾飛越百年秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):立意高古!將棋和夢(mèng)的特點(diǎn)描述到位!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">10.木瓜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玲瓏破解當(dāng)虛竹;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">公主寐求非慕容。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):以小說(shuō)中《天龍八部》的人物虛竹 和慕容故事線索成聯(lián),新穎別致!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">11.神采</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">東山雅量羊曇賭;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">衰境清心雞白逢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):化用《世說(shuō)新語(yǔ)·雅量》和陸游《辛酉除夕》中的典故,立意高古!工穩(wěn)!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">12.平淡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚漢硝煙眉上鎖;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">功名趣事枕邊游。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):很形象、生動(dòng)的句子,言之有物,點(diǎn)贊!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">13.拾夕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枰中殺伐由心布;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枕上莊周遇蝶迷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):典故化用巧妙,用詞沉穩(wěn)!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">南柯郡里鳳鸞締;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">淝水城中黑白爭(zhēng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):典故:南柯一夢(mèng),肥水之戰(zhàn)謝安下棋。化用得當(dāng)。對(duì)仗工穩(wěn)!贊!</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">14.余明桂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">神舟探宇挪星子;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">北斗巡航瞰繡針。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):用中國(guó)航天科技的探秘布局與中國(guó)夢(mèng)的實(shí)現(xiàn)來(lái)表現(xiàn)棋與夢(mèng),妙??!夸張手法運(yùn)用到位!必須贊!</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">15.怡然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉枕黃粱終是幻;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河漢界本無(wú)煙。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):本句自對(duì)得當(dāng),用詞工穩(wěn)、貼切!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">16.風(fēng)雨同舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">無(wú)聲布局硝煙起;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">有恨同衾暗淚流。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):將棋局的精彩與同床異夢(mèng)的成語(yǔ)表達(dá)到位!反對(duì)工穩(wěn)!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">17.開(kāi)心健康</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">排兵布陣平田里,</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">過(guò)海爬山臥榻中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):白描手法直入主題,本句自對(duì)工穩(wěn)!</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">18.執(zhí)著</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">韓信點(diǎn)兵方寸地;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">周公卜卦兩千年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):靈活引典,對(duì)比手法運(yùn)用有特點(diǎn)!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">19.玉文</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河漢界刀兵起;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暖榻南柯鼓瑟無(wú)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):靈活用典!一動(dòng)一靜,相得益彰!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">20.清風(fēng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楚河漢界狼煙起;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">瑤海瓊樓幻境臨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):對(duì)仗工穩(wěn)!描寫抓住了各自特點(diǎn)!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">21.默</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枕上尋詩(shī)生幻境;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">盤中逐鹿建皇權(quán)。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):白描手法運(yùn)用得當(dāng),直扣主題,簡(jiǎn)單明了!</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">22.二丫頭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">方圓落子終無(wú)悔;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">幻渺流年不可追。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):語(yǔ)淺言深,立意高古!</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">23. 上善若水</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑紅將帥爭(zhēng)天下;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">錦繡乾坤鎖幔中。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):本句自對(duì)運(yùn)用巧妙!用語(yǔ)新奇!</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">24.王龍超</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">高一招逢兇化險(xiǎn);</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">靜三更得善呈祥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):一般分詠聯(lián)的節(jié)奏是2212或2221,你的是322節(jié)奏,別出新意!本句自對(duì)不錯(cuò)!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">25.劉國(guó)慶 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飛馬過(guò)河爭(zhēng)地界;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浮生若戲繹南柯。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):直扣主題!比喻運(yùn)用得當(dāng)!過(guò)與若寬了些!</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">26.冉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑白指間爭(zhēng)勝負(fù);</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青黃枕上歷沉浮。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):白描手法得當(dāng)!語(yǔ)淺意深!用詞工穩(wěn)!</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">27.仰望星空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑白指間知進(jìn)退;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虛無(wú)境里有悲歡。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):言簡(jiǎn)意賅,對(duì)仗工穩(wěn)!描述到位!</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">28.夏花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 布陣排兵帷幄運(yùn);</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 橫空出世幻虛生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):本句自對(duì)可!橫空出世還可再琢!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">29.玲兒 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">方寸之間爭(zhēng)勝負(fù);</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">深宵虛中論沉浮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">評(píng):用詞新奇!將各自特點(diǎn)描述到位!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">30.一縷干云?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">閑觀楚漢風(fēng)云起;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虛現(xiàn)功名利祿來(lái)。</span></p><p class="ql-block">評(píng):本句自對(duì)得當(dāng)!直扣主題!</p>