<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??慈善詩(shī)會(huì)校長(zhǎng)：陌上花開(kāi)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??總編：牛欄草</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??成聯(lián)主編：星輝，綠色的詩(shī)，溫酒東籬，沉醉清風(fēng)，樂(lè)水，墨泉，巨寶，同路人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：星輝 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??美篇編輯：巨寶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??組稿：溫酒東籬 沉醉清風(fēng) 樂(lè)水牛欄草 綠色的詩(shī) 婧翔宇宙 星輝 蘇麻 墨泉……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">聲明：本聯(lián)集已經(jīng)獲得組稿聯(lián)友授權(quán)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">??????????????????????????????</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【慈善詩(shī)會(huì)26度聯(lián)圃】60期臨屏優(yōu)聯(lián)佳對(duì)集。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本次練習(xí)，參賽者有選擇的題聯(lián)對(duì)句，擇優(yōu)收錄美篇。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">聯(lián)意新穎的成聯(lián)針對(duì)性個(gè)評(píng)，另一些出眾成聯(lián)無(wú)評(píng)即評(píng)，是希望留有更多空間于讀者鑒賞。</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;">?～～～編委聯(lián)～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">牛欄草</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">展喉高嶺，不忘老驥一身，舊竹一枝，桑榆雖晚力猶在；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">棄夢(mèng)繁城，重種菜畦半壟，詩(shī)田半畝，歲月從來(lái)心未荒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">星輝</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫菊方開(kāi)，東籬把酒斟秋色；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丹萸遍插，北嶺登階祝鵠年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??自評(píng)：斟幾盞秋色，遙祝安康。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">綠色的詩(shī)</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丹楓臨水，黃菊倚籬，登樓一醉思鄉(xiāng)曲；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">玉露金風(fēng)，文星紫氣，望月同吟敬老詩(shī)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：秋色撩人，思鄉(xiāng)敬老，氣象全出。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">溫酒東籬</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">薄霧疏籬，獨(dú)酌重陽(yáng)寒沁袖；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">清霜瘦影，懷人令節(jié)淚欺腮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：雋永佳句，唇齒沁香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">沉醉清風(fēng)</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">辛丑重陽(yáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">只言秋染菊香，黃櫨似火迎佳節(jié)；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">豈料雨侵河漲，洪水如潮襲故園。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：一虛一實(shí)，真切可嘆！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">墨泉</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高舉目，霞涂畫(huà)景；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">賞菊興懷，詩(shī)話重陽(yáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：簡(jiǎn)潔有味，一字千金。</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span>～～～優(yōu)聯(lián)～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">水墨清芬</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">涼露蒼苔，碧水驚秋，斜陽(yáng)雁影櫨楓火；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">暮云遠(yuǎn)岫，黃花照眼，佳節(jié)詩(shī)篇翰墨香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：詩(shī)情畫(huà)意一副聯(lián)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">望遠(yuǎn)欣蔚</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">望不斷雙行旅雁，一抹閑云，翩翩共赴登高處；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">算無(wú)休幾縷秋香，半坡菊色，蕩蕩同來(lái)把酒時(shí)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：細(xì)品極有味道，功夫了得，領(lǐng)字尤贊！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">李建軍</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重陽(yáng)之際觀《長(zhǎng)津湖》——</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">拭淚縈懷，萬(wàn)里青山埋硬骨；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高放眼，三杯菊酒祭忠魂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：硬骨，改鐵骨，結(jié)合電影與重陽(yáng)，不錯(cuò)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">繡春刀</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)力偏狂，笑看吹帽；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">陽(yáng)光猶媚，醉賞插萸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：自然有味</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">冰之晶 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高懷遠(yuǎn)，一杯濁酒遙相寄；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">對(duì)景添愁，三徑黃花空自吟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：登高懷遠(yuǎn)，雅士孤影自吟。</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor">?</span>～～～合格聯(lián)～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">邊緣人類(lèi)</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茱萸有寄歸心夢(mèng)；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋月無(wú)言客路涼。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：筆法老道，渾然天成。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">亦美</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">王維佳節(jié)吟羈旅；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">清照黃昏嘆菊花。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：詩(shī)人入句，更添雅意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">子墨</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">邀君共酌茱萸酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">賞月同吟墨菊詩(shī)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：飲酒吟詩(shī)好雅興。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">胡鷹</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登樓縱目，萬(wàn)里流霞?xì)w我；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">借酒銷(xiāo)愁，半簾鉤月賒君。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：用筆飄逸俊美，題稍偏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">雪中情</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九初臨，千枝媚骨吐霜?dú)猓?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">絲絲故入，一寸柔懷牽鶴顏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：故入可酌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)中雨荷</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋晚人孤，西風(fēng)一曲多凄苦；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">山高夢(mèng)隔，菊酒三杯空念牽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：孤影涼夢(mèng)，珍重加衣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">一粟</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">霜染菊黃，呼朋攜酒登高去；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">風(fēng)催日短，倚檻思鄉(xiāng)敬老回。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：對(duì)仗工整，立意好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">張嵐</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">金風(fēng)拂面，玉露凝枝，游子登高庾嶺。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">楓葉流丹，菊花吐艷，椿庭倚望柴門(mén)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：本句自對(duì)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">王巖旭美新華 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重陽(yáng)節(jié)日登高處；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">萬(wàn)里江山入畫(huà)中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：下比猶好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">秋葉夏花</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋韻千般，萬(wàn)縷楓姿傾九月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">情懷一闕，三杯菊酒醉重陽(yáng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：對(duì)仗工整，數(shù)詞精巧。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">蘇麻</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">菊桂同馨，呼朋喚友登高去；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">桑榆非晚，得酒題詩(shī)對(duì)句來(lái)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：對(duì)仗工整，有情趣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">淡墨添香</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">對(duì)酒長(zhǎng)吟，籬菊當(dāng)風(fēng)香暗度；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登山遠(yuǎn)眺，越椒帶雨果初紅。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：繽紛色彩，呼之欲出。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">王詩(shī)媛</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重陽(yáng)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">葉葉紅霞尚滿天，重陽(yáng)漫步尋詩(shī)意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">階階黃菊猶盈眼，好景怡情度歲年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：前后分句缺少變化，有詩(shī)味，聯(lián)味稍淡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">金蕊</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">百念動(dòng)心懷，浮云幾片輕輕繞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">眾生高目極，晴日千山采采收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">黃法</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九重陽(yáng)，作賦吟詩(shī)需菊酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">年年今日，登高賞月在書(shū)樓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">劉寶山</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">陶潛賞菊常酤酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">摩詰題詩(shī)為憶人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">大漠胡楊 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">賞菊庭前，一片思情飛故里；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高嶺上，兩行熱淚落他鄉(xiāng)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">仗劍天涯</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">賞菊登高君有意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">題詩(shī)把酒我多情。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">陌年微涼</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">霧鎖寒窗，酒醉無(wú)眠夜；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">身依冷月，詩(shī)懷在外人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">葉落灼秋</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九月他鄉(xiāng)猶作客</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重陽(yáng)遠(yuǎn)處獨(dú)登高</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">羅楊莉</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">賞菊登高尋舊夢(mèng)；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">題詩(shī)把酒解新愁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">原始森林</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登山四野楓林艷；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">倚檻千枝菊蕊香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">青澄</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">東籬載酒迎歸客；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">南雁穿云入好詩(shī)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">云溪</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重陽(yáng)望遠(yuǎn)登高處；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">萬(wàn)里懷人飲醉中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">人生如夢(mèng)</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">觀楓賞菊登高處；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">觸景生情憶故人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">晨曦</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">佳節(jié)又重陽(yáng)，攜友登高神奕奕；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">濃情加美酒，吟詩(shī)賞菊樂(lè)悠悠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">冷月清秋</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">歲又重陽(yáng)，慈母回鄉(xiāng)親故舊；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">時(shí)將九月，諸兄對(duì)酒客京華。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">楓林晚景</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">望遠(yuǎn)登高，重陽(yáng)氣爽深秋意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">相親敬老，白發(fā)神清孝子心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">夏日風(fēng)情 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">懷舊感新，菊酒濃濃當(dāng)此日； </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高望遠(yuǎn)，茱萸艷艷又三秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：登高感懷，菊酒遙祝更好</span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;">?～～～瑕疵聯(lián)～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">紫嫣</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">采菊踏秋留玉液；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登山遠(yuǎn)眺見(jiàn)瓊枝。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：遠(yuǎn)眺與踏秋詞性不對(duì)品，遠(yuǎn)眺改為眺遠(yuǎn)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">梁師誼友 </b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">寒露長(zhǎng)城，北國(guó)千山失綠；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重陽(yáng)霜影，南州萬(wàn)里藏芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：長(zhǎng)城／霜影欠工，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">慧心緣</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋色漸濃，把酒吟詩(shī)楓似火； </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">故人將老，思鄉(xiāng)憶母淚如泉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：下聯(lián)前分句與后分句搭配不妥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">煙雨江南</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">年年福壽登高處；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九重陽(yáng)憶故人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：九九重陽(yáng)意有重復(fù)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">張?jiān)?lt;/b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九登高，童趣夢(mèng)想身姣??；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">萸囊已舊，老叟雄心上頂峰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：多處詞組結(jié)構(gòu)不一致，詞性不對(duì)品。不規(guī)則重字，上聯(lián)尾句失替。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">李郢</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登高望遠(yuǎn)，茱萸嶺上隨兒慮；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">對(duì)景思親，萱草堂前解母憂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：意好，不符馬蹄格。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">花邊云彩</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">籬邊白菊，佳期怒放重陽(yáng)意；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">露上丹楓，登高望遠(yuǎn)茱萸情。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：菊雅楓艷，恰逢其時(shí)。下聯(lián)后分句失對(duì)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">東爾君</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">九九歸真呈祥瑞；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雙雙返璞現(xiàn)安康。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：上聯(lián)失替，祥應(yīng)平</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">娜娜磊</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">雁影歸鄉(xiāng)游子韻</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">重陽(yáng)賞菊度金秋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：游子/韻與度/金秋，節(jié)奏點(diǎn)不一致</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">潮韻明月</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一點(diǎn)閑情，步步登高，邀友攜壺共飲吉祥酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">幾分雅興，年年攬勝，臨風(fēng)負(fù)手同吟古韻詩(shī)。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：意境不錯(cuò)，吉祥與古韻詞組結(jié)構(gòu)不一致</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">婧翔宇宙</b><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丹楓著艷，蘆葦搖蓬，節(jié)令恰逢疏朗好；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">黃菊吐芬，草花凝露，世間最美是清秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">??簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：后分句多處結(jié)構(gòu)不一致，節(jié)奏點(diǎn)不對(duì)等。</span></p>