<p class="ql-block">楊鐵夫問詞于朱祖謀,惟告其退而多讀而已?!端茦窃~》,丁亥始知之,乙巳方讀之。匆匆一眼,略記淺見,恨不能退而多讀而已。</p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">水云樓詞·卷一</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">?</b></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【甘州】</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(甘州集中總7闋。僅亞于菩薩蠻8闋。而季者木蘭花慢,虞美人,齊天樂,徵招則各4闋。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[余少識劉梅史于武昌,不見且二十年。辛亥余為淮南鹽官,梅史自吳來訪,秋窗話舊,清淚盈睫,其漂泊更不余若也。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">怪西風(fēng)、偏</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(命運多舛,多少無奈。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">聚斷腸人,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(題面。意足。下見騰挪手段。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">相逢又天涯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(重申。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">似</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(擬物。騰出空間。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">晴空墮葉,偶隨寒</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(寒字集中九十幾處。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">雁,吹集</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)聚,逢兩字。用『在』則狀態(tài)而已。用『落』則動作而已。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">平沙。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承上句。比喻。墮葉寒雁承西風(fēng)。吹集平沙承相逢天涯。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">塵世幾番蕉鹿,春</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(春字集中一百五十幾處。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">夢冷窗紗。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(就際遇而感慨。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">一夜巴山雨,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承秋窗話舊。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">雙鬢都華。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(即二十年。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖用典,生僻而不隔,甜熟而不厭,以其情真力滿故。〗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎笑指江邊黃鶴,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(武昌黃鶴樓。呼應(yīng)少識于武昌。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">問樓頭明月,今為誰斜。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(虛寫。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">共飄零千里,燕子尚無家。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(拉回當(dāng)前。實寫。謂漂泊。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">且休賣、珊瑚寶玦,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈jué。/佩玉。〉</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(昔。富足。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">看青衫、寫恨入琵琶。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(今。窮困。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">同懷感,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(收束。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">把悲秋</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋字集中六十幾處。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">淚,彈上蘆花。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋淚、蘆花呼應(yīng)西風(fēng)。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖有朋自遠方來而每生天涯淪落之感,鹿潭常調(diào),亦是神也?!?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【東風(fēng)第一枝·冬至】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雀誶</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈suì ?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(誶,告知。乍暖還寒,故多相告。若用噪則無關(guān)天時了。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">晴檐,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(暖而寒。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">蠅蘇</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(蘇字妥帖。誶、蘇一聽覺一視覺對舉。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">凍紙,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(擬人。寒而暖。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">嚴(yán)霜忽作輕暖。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(主句。下皆從乍暖還寒寫去。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">錦貂才近熏爐,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(實寫寒。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鳳律暗</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(暗字集中近五十處。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">移翠琯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(虛寫暖。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">尋春無處,但日日、春痕偷展。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。從暗移說來。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">恰</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈正好?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">引起、千丈愁</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(愁字凡集中近七十處。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">思,添似繡床金線。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(添,愁思每增也。千丈愁思是果,尋春無處是因。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎云影薄、畫簾乍</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈剛?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">卷。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(暖。遠。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">山意冷、瘦筇又懶。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(寒。遠。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">幾多釀雪樓臺,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(寒。近。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">豫</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈通『預(yù)』?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">滌熨寒酒盞。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(暖。近。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">梅魂知否,怕迤邐</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈yǐ lǐ 。/悠長?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">年華將換。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(挽起愁思。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">待借他、一縷東風(fēng),悄</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈寂靜無聲?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">把萬花吹轉(zhuǎn)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(東風(fēng)浩蕩則言一縷。梅花小小則以萬數(shù)。結(jié)即振起。呼應(yīng)上片的春痕偷展。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【一萼紅】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">[清明前一日,偕周蓮伯散步城北,紅日已西,乃至虹橋,復(fù)買小舟過桃花庵、蓮性寺,煙水凄然,游人絕少,共溯洄</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈逆水而上?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">者漁船三兩而已。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">趁春晴,步前汀未晚,舟小蹙</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(形象。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">波行。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(散步買舟。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">抱樹溪彎,眠沙石老,芳草隨意青青。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(舟行所見。抱、眠甚佳。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">乍驚起、閑鷗短夢,伴落日、三兩棹歌聲。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(由視覺轉(zhuǎn)向聽覺。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">水曲豪箏,柳陰叢笛,那處重聽。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(由當(dāng)前追憶往昔。承閑鷗短夢。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎多少夕陽</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(重落日了。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">樓閣,倚闌干不見,空見流鶯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(順敘。當(dāng)前。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">螢苑星繁,虹橋月艷,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(艷字尖新。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">還記玉輦</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈niǎn。玉輦:帝王乘坐的車?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">曾經(jīng)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。往昔繁花。記字集中近三十處。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">自湖上游仙事杳,問桃花、又過幾清明。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(過渡到當(dāng)前。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">剩取凄煙楚雨,愁畫蕪城。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(逆接。起春晴。結(jié)凄煙楚雨。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【謁金門】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人未起,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(平去仄。第二字宜去聲。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">桐影暗</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(未起,故不曾睹見。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">移窗紙。隔夜酒香添睡美,鵲聲春夢里。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(倒敘。見曲折。酒香睡美是主觀原因,未起是果。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎妝罷小屏獨倚,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(睡起。孤單。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">風(fēng)定柳花到地。欲拾斷紅憐素指,卷簾呼燕子。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(足見寂寞。亦未起之客觀原因。卷簾呼鶯燕,鹿潭詞中常見。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【掃花游】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">點波細雨,乍泥</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈阻滯,糾纏?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(鹿潭善用泥字。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">住歸人,便遲</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈遲滯?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">春信。布帆漫</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈徒然。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">整。滿空江化酒,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(謂雨。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">別筵花韻。數(shù)遍郵簽,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈郵簽,夜間報時的更籌?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">也怕鶯期未準(zhǔn)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(滯人。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">雁程緊。試悄向故園,先探芳訊。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(滯春。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎歸</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(歸字集中七十幾處。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">夢今夜穩(wěn)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(穩(wěn)字精警。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">奈</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈怎奈?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">濕霧濛濛,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)細雨。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">畫樓難認。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(歸人。前一韻果。又后一韻,轉(zhuǎn),因。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">野梅瘦損。為凄吟客里,剩紅銷盡。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(春信。前一韻因。后一韻,承,果。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">墮水流香,又把孤蓬</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)布帆。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">暗引。醉鄉(xiāng)近。壓春潮、一船幽恨。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。合寫歸人春信。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【木蘭花慢 ·江行晚過北固山】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">泊秦淮雨霽,又</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(又。非首次過北固山。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">燈火、送歸船。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(雨泊霽行。入題。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">正樹擁云昏,星垂野闊,暝色浮天。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(對得勻停。所見。遠景。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">蘆邊。</span><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(轉(zhuǎn)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">夜潮驟起,暈波心、月影蕩江圓。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(所見。近景。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">夢醒誰歌楚些,泠泠霜激哀弦。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(所聽。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎嬋娟。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(連下。呼應(yīng)月影。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">不語對愁眠。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)夢醒。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">往事恨難捐。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈捐除?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(下就往事寫去。追敘。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">看莽莽南徐,蒼蒼北固,如此山川。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(大凡江山如此者,皆無限蒼涼感也。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鉤連。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(連下。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">更無</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(兩字沉痛語也。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鐵鎖。任排空檣櫓自回旋。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(清軍更無,英軍自回旋。形勢險要竟拱手讓人矣。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">寂寞魚龍睡穩(wěn),</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(睡就罷了,還穩(wěn)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">傷心付與秋煙。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(傷心呼應(yīng)哀弦。秋煙呼應(yīng)雨霽。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">〖兵事過后,臨地興嘆。雖健筆凌云,亦局外寫來而已。未若后之教人身同感受也。〗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【瑣窗寒 】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">[荒江晚泊,清寒送秋,記去年款紅軒茗話,正此時也。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">細竹通涼,疏苔媚雨,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(鹿潭喜以涼對雨,月之物。樓外。環(huán)境。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">曉簾慵卷。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(樓內(nèi)。慵字暗寫人。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">窺花隔座,鏡里暗傳嬌眼。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(寫女主動作。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">最憐他、傷春未工,畫眉錯問愁深淺。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(寫女主心理。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">甚妝樓一霎,西風(fēng)</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋天。正此時也。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">如葉,夢云吹散。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追憶。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎重見。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(換境。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">羞郎面。但恨指吳山,斷霞沉晚。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(此三韻寫重見時。上片可能初見,是愁深淺。重見,是恨。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">扁舟暝宿,冷月稀星孤伴。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)序晚泊。孤伴,一個人了。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">繞空江、蘆花夜明,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)小序晚泊。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">去鴻影淡煙岫遠。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(</span>造境。<span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251); font-size:18px;">人已遠行。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">又寒莎、兩岸鳴蟲,細語驚秋換。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。鹿潭善于造境為結(jié)。結(jié)句插入視覺。又呼應(yīng)清寒送秋。)?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?【浪淘沙】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">云氣壓虛闌。青失</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">遙山。雨絲風(fēng)絮一番番。上巳清明都過了,只是春寒。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(春陰春寒,不道一人。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎花發(fā)已無端。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈無故?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">何況花殘。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(復(fù)迭法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">飛來蝴蝶又成團。明日朱樓人睡起,莫卷簾看。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(花發(fā)花落,只有蝴蝶。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖春暮悵觸,騷人手段而已,無須附會拔高。〗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【渡江云 】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">[春明</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈春明門。指京城。〉</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">再到,人事都非,崔護蕭郎,一時同感。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕泥銜杏雨,爐熏隱篆,朱戶晝愔愔。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈yīn。/形容靜寂,深沉?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">半窗松影碎,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">小語分茶,日暖喚青禽。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(兩個場景。敘相識。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">羊車再到,那不見、招手樓陰。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(再到。入題。又留到下片才寫。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">空自踏、落花歸去,消歇酒杯心。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句佳。不遇而歸。上片順敘。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎沉吟。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(換。插敘不遇。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">紅墻幾尺,遠過蓬山,更難通魚錦。換盡了、陌頭柳色,愁滿羅襟。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(蕭郎。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">夢中常訂重逢約,甚</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈真。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">隔窗、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(窗字重上,可避。宜按刻本簾字。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">翻</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈反而?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">怕相尋。門又掩、碧桃一樹春深。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(造境自佳。崔護。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【綺羅香·寒菜】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曉露荒園,斜陽破寺,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(互文。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">十畝螀</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈寒蟬。秋天鳴叫?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">聲啼遍。倦綠無多,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承上。收束。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">生意井闌西畔。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(轉(zhuǎn)。啟下。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">繞槿籬、蝶影還飛,近麥隴、馬蹄偏賤。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(順承。愛惜生意。周夢莊疏證云,賤,棄而不用。即棄馬不騎,以免踐踏莊稼。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">怪年年、冷逐蓬蒿,閉門秋老壯心懶。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(換。入己身。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎齏</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈jī。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鹽</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈喻生活清貧?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">滋味最好,記伴西風(fēng)信里,莼羹菰飯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。應(yīng)秋老句。下片人事。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">笠影鴉鋤,因甚故鄉(xiāng)歸晚。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(過渡到當(dāng)前。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">待青玉、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈酒?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">一甕春深,剩黃葉、半畦霜淺。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(此處對法比馬賤句佳。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">認挑燈、細雨山家,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(細雨無據(jù)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">客來寒夜剪。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(結(jié)點題。剪寒菜。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">?</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【壽樓春】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(1, 1, 1); font-size:18px;">[揚州之行,歷春徂</span><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0); font-size:18px;">〈cú/ 至?!?lt;/span><span style="color:rgb(1, 1, 1); font-size:18px;">秋,萍梗再移,短夢云散,作閑情賦。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">過垂楊春城。羂</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈juàn/ 張網(wǎng)捕捉?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">游絲一縷,偷倚紅情。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(入題。揚州之行??倢?。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">記得開簾收</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(收者在此。歸則在彼。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">燕,隔花調(diào)鶯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(謂冶游。分敘。春。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">桃葉渡,誰相迎。又幾番、潮生潮平。待菱唱船歸,荷香路悄,留月伴娉婷。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(聚。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎西風(fēng)起,涼蟬鳴。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">早拋閑素扇,歌斷瑤箏。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(散。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">可奈</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(轉(zhuǎn)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">詩題愁寄,夢回?zé)o憑。珠戶寂,銀釭明。任</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(再轉(zhuǎn)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">聽殘、秋宵長更。但</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(三轉(zhuǎn)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">疏雨空階,蕭蕭半山黃葉聲。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(造境。景語作情語。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖有謂此調(diào)字某聲某者。字者乃詞譜平仄所定,此調(diào)多非律句,多連用平聲之句,自然有字拗之謂。聲者選韻之故也。此闋『庚青』韻部,凄苦中見激越。宜多吟誦揣摩之。〗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【水龍吟】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[沈珠傳奇好以落花蝴蝶泥</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈糾纏要求?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px;">人賦詩,為填此闋。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">絳娥吹墮瑤京,可憐艷骨多塵土。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句佳。雅健。落花。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">幾番夢醒,仙衣重試,冶游愁數(shù)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(蝴蝶。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">寶扇兜云,玉階《團雪》,欲離還聚。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(落花。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">恨東風(fēng)力倦,娉婷雙翅,銜不上朱樓去。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(蝴蝶。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎記共踏青歸路。斗盈盈、瘦腰紅舞。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。逆入。合寫花蝶。接下又就落花專一引申。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">西鄰再過,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(當(dāng)前。平出。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">滿庭莎草,一天飛絮。枝老春空,水流香在,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(對法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">綠陰千樹。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(大凡寫落花都突出綠的多。所謂綠肥紅瘦也。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">但銷魂歌板,年年彈淚,憶花開處。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【甘州】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[王午橋,常山人,詞筆清麗似吳夢窗,渡滹沱</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈hū tuó〉</span><span style="font-size:18px;">時相見。庚午</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(周夢莊疏證云當(dāng)為丙午。劉勇剛箋注云當(dāng)為庚戌。)</span><span style="font-size:18px;">復(fù)遇于南中,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈南方?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px;">云自越絕</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈會稽?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px;">返都門也。歌而送之。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">記疏林霜墮蘄〈qí。〉門秋,高談四筵驚。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘初遇。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">擊珊瑚欲碎,長歌裂石,分取狂名。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承高談。補足人物形象。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">短夢依依同話,風(fēng)雨客窗燈。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(復(fù)遇。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">一醉江湖老,人似春星。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(合寫。英雄易老,人才凋零。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎驀上長安舊路,悵春來王粲,還賦離亭。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)序歌而送之。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">喚天涯綠遍,今夜子規(guī)聲。待攀取、垂楊寄遠,怕楊花、比客更飄零。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(遞進。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">凄涼調(diào),向琵琶聲里,唱徹幽并。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【蝶戀花】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">云影壓檐蛩語咽。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(壓,咽,鹿潭喜用。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">涼雨聲聲、心碎梧桐葉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(近。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">天外雁程飛又歇,小屏山上晴沙闊。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(遠。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎愁減腰圍添鬢雪。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。過片寫人。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">慵戀寒花、病似殘秋蝶。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">題罷瑤箋和淚疊,相思后夜團團月。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(碎,愁,慵,病,淚。翻箱倒柜了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【金菊對芙蓉】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[層云閣陰,春寒不休,年年梅子黃時,客懷如是。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日澹還收,云低不落,輕寒輕暖輕陰。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(主句。室外天氣。梅雨天。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">正珠弦響澀,寬褪湘琴。獸爐潮暈香遲起,似潑水、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(三字突兀。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">庭戶愔愔。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(室內(nèi)場景。梅雨天。弦澀香潮庭愔愔。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">疏簾影里,晝長人懶,都戀香衾。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈qīn。/被子?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(室內(nèi)人。梅雨天,人也賴床。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎費盡春深春淺,把春人釀作、梅子酸心。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。客懷。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">怕東風(fēng)去后,夢更難尋。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)戀香衾。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">近來天亦愁如睡,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鎖山眉、雨意沉沉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)上片首韻。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">無端送別,絮飛花落,偏是而今。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(造境為結(jié)。)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?【探芳訊·瓜洲夜渡】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大江暮。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(暮,所見有限,接著寫所聽。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">漸</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈立刻。不久?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">遠寺沉鐘,津亭換鼓。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(沉鐘換鼓句佳。遠寫。所聽。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">趁荒荒殘月,斜帆夜深渡。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(行舟。由遠過渡至近。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">懵騰夢在寒潮里,浪齧</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈niè。/啃,咬。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">船唇語。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(謂浪拍船之聲如獸啃木。近寫。所聽。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">信</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈放任。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">西風(fēng)、棹入菰蘆,纜維霜樹。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(從行舟到系舟。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎回首竹西路。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。逆入。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">剩</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(荒涼可知。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鴉宿孤村,雁驚遙戍。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(村靜無擾故可宿。戍有巡哨故驚之。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">星火微茫,曉色亂瓜步。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。遠。拉回當(dāng)前。平出。上片暮——夜——過片曉。時間變化中。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">數(shù)聲漁笛吹秋起,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(近。舟中。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">往事空煙浦。正無聊,篷背瀟瀟細雨。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);"> (以景語作情語。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【木蘭花慢】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[中秋日,周桐實自浙西歸,得周蓮伯字。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">亂霞晴隔浦,正橫笛、暮江樓。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(以下樓上所見。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">看沙際潮回,城陰樹暝,帆勢遙收。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(遠景。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">灣頭。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(換。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">數(shù)枝瘦柳,尚依稀、認得去時舟。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(近景。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">雁外</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(遠。對方。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">心傳錦字,鷗邊</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(近。己身。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">夢閣</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">〈通『擱』?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">離愁。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(得蓮伯字。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎凝眸。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(換。再遠景。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">桂影碧空浮。誰共舉瓊甌。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(引發(fā)感慨。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">問西湖</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(蓮伯在浙)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">今夜,幾分明月,可似揚州。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(鹿潭在揚州。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">重游。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(換。往后寫。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">待拌</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈甘愿?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">醉倒,怕石橋、楓冷又深秋。折得蘆花懶寄,絮云吹滿芳洲。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(造境。繞回當(dāng)前。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【月下笛 】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[院落乍秋,亂蛩絮壁,賦寄眉月樓。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">淺樹留云,疏花倚石,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(上句佳。下句平平。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">小亭秋聚。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(首韻聚時。院落。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">風(fēng)泉暗語。夜深琴韻愁譜。芭蕉葉碎桐陰減,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">料不礙、空階細雨。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(兩韻別后。院落。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">奈箋紋疊雪,箏床橫玉,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈橫笛?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">舊情無數(shù)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(后四字引起下片。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎休賦。歸來句。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(當(dāng)作句中韻五字句看。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">待采遍芙蓉,隔江煙霧。吹簫俊侶。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(虛寫聚時。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">跨鸞今在何許。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(別后。下就相思生發(fā)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">相思淚滴珊瑚枕,尚夢到、穿針院宇。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(從對方落筆。又繞回院落。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">只后夜酒醒時,滿地鳴蟲自苦。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(可見相思之重。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【柳梢青】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">芳草閑門,清明過了,酒滯香塵。白楝花開,海棠花落,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承芳草。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">容易黃昏。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淡淡一筆,風(fēng)韻自生。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎東風(fēng)陣陣斜曛,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)黃昏。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">任倚遍、紅闌未溫。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)閑門。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">一片春愁,漸吹漸起,恰似春云。 </span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(造境。承東風(fēng)句。春字重??杀堋#?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【凄涼犯】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(1, 1, 1); font-size:18px;">[十二月十七日夜,大寒。讀書至漏三下,屋小如舟,虛窗生白,不知是月是雪。因憶江南野泊,雪壓篷背時光景,正復(fù)似之。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">短檐鐵馬,和冰語、敲階更少殘葉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(屋外。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鼠聲漸起,蕓編倦擁,酒懷添渴。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">疏燈暈結(jié)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(屋內(nèi)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">覺霜逼、簾衣自裂。似扁舟、風(fēng)來舵尾,野岸冷云疊。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(扁舟伏下下片。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎回首垂虹夜,瘦櫓搖波,一枝簫咽。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">窗鳴敗紙,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)簾衣句。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">尚驚疑、打篷干雪。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(兼寫,作過渡。兩韻重復(fù)小序而已。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">悄護銅瓶,怕寒重、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(不知是月是雪。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">梅花暗折。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(拉回當(dāng)前。憂梅。周夢莊疏云,梅花暗折,一語成讖。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">卻開門、樹影滿地,壓凍月。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(看梅。原來是月。)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?【探春】</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(一名《探春慢》,有別于《探春令》。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[己酉秋暮,飲于珠溪,奉觴人頗似阿素,霧鬢風(fēng)鬟</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈huán?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px;">,飄零亦相若也。感成此解。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">墮葉紅腴,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(腴字穩(wěn)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">疏苔</span><span style="font-size:22px;">綠倦,年華輕換箏柱。玉病禁秋,花嬌媚晚,燭底鬢添涼霧。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(年換鬢添,美人遲暮。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">縹緲驚鴻影,似乍</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈初。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">見、春風(fēng)前度。暗憐舞褪絲楊,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承輕換。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鏡中消瘦眉嫵。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承鬢添。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎蘇小芳顏認否。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)春風(fēng)前度。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">甚</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈真?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">油壁歸來,偏恨遲暮。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)上片。始出遲暮兩字。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">帶眼移香,琴心記夢,鉛淚也無重數(shù)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(所感。己身。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">寒雨連江夜,莫更把、琵琶低訴。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(謂將別。奉觴人。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">明日相思,峭帆還掛</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">愁</span><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">去。 </span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(往后寫。飄零。合寫。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【踏莎行 】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[癸丑三月賦]</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(二月金陵城破。三月有所感也。周夢莊疏云,宋玉招魂,子山作賦,千禩而下,古今同感慨也。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">疊砌苔深,遮窗松密。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(深,密,足見久無打理。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">無人小院纖塵隔。斜陽雙燕</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(雙關(guān)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">欲歸來,卷簾錯放楊花</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(雙關(guān)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">入。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎蝶怨香遲,鶯嫌語澀。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(嫌,澀。略覺差可。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">老紅吹盡春無力。東風(fēng)一夜</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淪陷之速。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">轉(zhuǎn)平蕪,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈雜草繁茂的平原?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">可憐愁滿江南北。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淪陷之廣。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖自此為詞,聲聞肅殺,心增余悸。〗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【滿庭芳】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[秋水時至,海陵諸村落輒成湖蕩。小舟來去,竟日在蘆花中。余居此既久,亦忘岑寂。鄉(xiāng)人偶至,話及兵革,詠“我亦有家歸未得”之句,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(明·陶宗儀句『我亦有家歸未得,浙江東去路微茫?!唬?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px;">不覺悵然。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黃葉人家,蘆花天氣,到門秋水成湖。攜尊船過,帆小入菰蒲。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。就序?qū)懭?。?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">誰識天涯倦客,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(己身。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">野橋外、寒雀驚呼。還惆悵、霜前瘦影,人似柳蕭疏。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎愁余。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(過渡)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">空自把、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(續(xù)筆愁余。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鄉(xiāng)心寄雁,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淪落。離鄉(xiāng)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">泛宅依鳧。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(依鳧佳。應(yīng)上片到門成湖。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">任相逢一笑,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淪落。天涯。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">不是吾廬。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(泛宅。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">漫托魚波萬頃,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(泛宅。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">便秋風(fēng)、難問莼鱸。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淪落。思鄉(xiāng)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">空江上,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(泛宅。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">沉沉戍鼓,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淪落。兵革。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">落日大旗孤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖有話可說,又寫之如話。結(jié)更有所指,自然合作?!?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【瑤華·敗荷】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青房</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈蓮蓬。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">乍</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈剛?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">結(jié),夢醒江南,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(主句。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">又雨聲敲碎。羅衣</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈蓮葉?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">葉葉寒未剪,亂壓一湖深翠。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。首兩韻,秋荷。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">月明歌斷,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">更誰倚、畫船閑醉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承夢醒江南。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">剩數(shù)叢、敗葦荒蘆,合寫橫塘秋意。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋池。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎飄零</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(轉(zhuǎn)。見景而感。入己身。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">漫惜青衫,算舞散湘皋,都是憔悴。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)江南句。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鴛鴦自浴,竟不管、悄換西風(fēng)塵世。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(與秋荷作比。應(yīng)秋池。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">凄涼太液,莫暗滴、露盤清淚。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(合寫。承飄零。鴛鴦自欲而不管塵世悄換,太液凄涼,露盤淚滴,似有所指。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">待幾時重展枯香,斜日小橋魚市。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(預(yù)敘。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖切合己身,關(guān)乎時事。所詠枯荷,生發(fā)而已,皮相而已?!?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【蝶戀花·北游道上】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">沙外斜陽車影淡。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(淡,足見人跡稀。投店。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">紅杏深深,人語黃茅店。陌上馬塵吹又暗。柳花風(fēng)里征衣減。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(屋外。減,說明暖和。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎屋后箏弦鶯語艷。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(艷字突兀。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">濁酒孤琴,門對春寒掩。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">鴉背殘霜侵短劍,紙窗夢破疏燈飐。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈zhǎn。/顫動?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(屋內(nèi)。呼應(yīng)春寒。)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?【 木蘭花慢】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[甲寅四月,客有自金陵來者,感賦此闋。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">破驚濤一葉,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(橫空一筆。見氣勢。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">看千里、陣圖開。正鐵鎖橫江,長旗樹</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">壘,半壁塵埃。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(難得如此壯筆。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">秦淮。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(轉(zhuǎn)。另起一意。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">幾星燐火,錯驚疑、燈影舊樓臺。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(看朱成碧,認知錯亂中。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">落日征帆黯黯,沉江戍鼓哀哀。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(筆勢跌落。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎安排。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(轉(zhuǎn)。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">多少清才。弓掛樹,字磨崖。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(人才凋零。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">甚</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈真。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">繞雀寒枝,聞雞曉色,歲月無涯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(歲月消磨。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">云埋蔣山自碧,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)燐火。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">打空城只有夜潮來。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)秦淮。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">誰倚莫愁艇子,一川煙雨徘徊。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(景語作情語。徘徊者,非流連景色也。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖心之憂懼,形之苦痛,畢陳于詞,安不戚戚然?!?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【玉京秋·秋江晚泊,用草窗韻】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江影闊。孤帆卸</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈降下?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">天際,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(泊。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">倦懷凄切。晴樹生秋,岸風(fēng)送響,篷敲殘葉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋。舟。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">山勒</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈割?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">寒潮怒起,涌波心、千萬堆雪。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(江。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">者</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈這。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">離別、一程程恨,去鴻愁說。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)天際倦懷。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎日落征衫寒怯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(晚。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">數(shù)歸期、冰輪又缺。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)去鴻。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">漬酒羅襟,緘詩瑤軸,馀香都歇。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)倦懷。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">瘦菊霜橙,怕客里、偏過登臨佳節(jié)。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">暮笳咽。沙影沉沉動月。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(江。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖寒秋夜泊,遣詞自是幽蒼。再者字句倒置,詞筆又見峭健?!?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">附 周密:《玉京秋·長安獨客,又見西風(fēng),素月丹楓,凄然其為秋也,因調(diào)夾鐘羽一解》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">煙水闊。高林弄殘照,晚蜩凄切。畫角吹寒,碧砧度韻,銀床飄葉。衣濕桐陰露冷,采涼花、時賦秋雪。嘆輕別。一襟幽事,砌蛩能說。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">◎◎客思吟商還怯。怨歌長、瓊壺暗缺。翠扇陰疏,紅衣香褪,翻成消歇。玉骨西風(fēng),恨最恨、閑卻新涼時節(jié)。楚簫咽。誰倚西樓淡月。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【高陽臺】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暗水平橋,明霞低浦,霜痕冷閣</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈通『擱』?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">魚叉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(魚叉與下無涉。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">才一番寒,微黃卻上蒹葭。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(秋景。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">瘦腰不恨秋來早,恨秋來、偏在天涯。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(推開一層,復(fù)進一步,夢窗慣用。如吳文英《高陽臺》句『南樓不恨吹橫笛,恨曉風(fēng)、千里關(guān)山』。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">更堪傷、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(加深一層。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">十載荷衣,吟鬢蒼華。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(愁人。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎燈邊記得分明語,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。逆入。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">待夢圓鵲鏡、窗倚蟲紗。幾日西風(fēng),雁歸/客未還家。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(拉回當(dāng)前。平出。應(yīng)偏在天涯。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">陌頭柳色渾</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈都?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">難覓,滿空江、換了蘆花。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)蒹葭。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">又斜陽、過盡西樓</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">,(應(yīng)冷閣。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">都是昏鴉。 </span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(尾兩韻秋景。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【好事近】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">吹遍野塘風(fēng),顰</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈憂愁?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">翠倦</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈疲勞?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">紅都歇。寂寞斜陽墻角,見/春前蝴蝶。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎籬根露滴海棠疏,蟲影顫</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(字法。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">秋葉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(五字承上片。蟲,蝴蝶。影,斜陽或涼月。顫,風(fēng)動。秋葉,顰翠句。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">猶有一分花意,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(顰翠倦紅。海棠疏。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">媚/空階涼月。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【一萼紅】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[墻角小梅,未春忽放,因憶東園萬樹,摧殘可憐,哀吟成調(diào),歌竟凄然。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">短墻陰。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(墻角。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">怪東風(fēng)未到,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(未春。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">春色已深深。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(忽放。白石惡習(xí),詞即是序,序即是詞。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">壓雪檐低,垂蘿徑窄,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(一低一窄,有所不便。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">紅萼開、倩誰簪。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(物。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">漫惆悵、天寒袖薄,喚玉笛、吹怨入空林。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(人。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">烽火連江,河山滿眼,那處登臨。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(尾韻則知東風(fēng)未到有所指哉。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎回首東園舊路,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">剩幾分流水,幾樹寒岑。冷雨宮垣,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈yuán。〉</span><span style="font-size:22px;">斜陽喬木,還聽笳鼓沉沉。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)烽火連江。物之摧殘。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">待銷盡、華鬘</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈mán?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">小劫,洗冰淚、招客說傷心。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(人之傷心。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">只怕南枝開遍,沒個人尋。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(回到梅上。)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【垂楊·送陳百生北游】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">偷彈老淚。向</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈對?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">短亭話別,蘭舟重艤。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈yǐ。/ 停船靠岸?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">韻咽寒簫,斷腸聽到篷窗底。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(斷腸承老淚。篷窗承蘭舟。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">魚灘風(fēng)定蘆花起。破霜色、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(承蘆花句。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">天涯行李。晚來潮催送秋心,共故人千里。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(千里承天涯。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎猶記題詩舊邸。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈dǐ?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">染京洛暗塵,醉春游騎。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。逆入。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">戍鼓驚秋,夢魂還渡桑乾水。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(接下三韻,現(xiàn)在。平出。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">連村黃葉圍殘壘。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(應(yīng)戍鼓。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">雁聲在、斜陽紅里。何時一笛,山樓杯共洗。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(未來。往后寫。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【 揚州慢】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px;">[癸丑十一月二十七日,賊趨京口,報官軍收揚州。]</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">野幕巢烏,旗門噪鵲,譙樓吹斷笳聲。過滄桑一霎,又舊日</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(沉痛。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">蕪城。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(立足荒蕪,上一韻寫軍營。后兩韻寫民居。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">怕雙雁</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(小序云十一月底,怕見乃預(yù)敘法,宜按刻本用燕字。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">歸來恨晚,斜陽頹閣,不忍重登。但紅橋風(fēng)雨,梅花開落空營。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎劫灰到處,便司空見慣都驚。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(到處寫空間。見慣寫時間。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">問障扇遮塵,圍棋賭墅,可奈蒼生。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(下寫劫灰。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">月黑流螢何處,西風(fēng)黯、鬼火星星。更傷心南望,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(南望,賊趨京口,復(fù)有所憂。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">隔江無數(shù)峰青。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">〖敘事即景,立足真實。結(jié)有詞心而更見高明。若作寄望官軍乘勝語,又俗套了。噫!魚龍睡穩(wěn),鴛鴦自浴,官軍安有可托哉?!?lt;/span></p><p class="ql-block">補:傅靜庵謂鹿潭之揚州慢,是真實境界,真實力量,其心中眼中,已無古人影子,寧甘為白石者乎。</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">?【 虞美人 ·初三夜月】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冰痕微借斜陽送。鉤小驚魚夢。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(句法。首二韻實寫。峨眉月。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">多情還說十分圓。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(虛寫。圓月。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">才畫些兒/眉意便嬋娟。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(合寫。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎籠階夜色如煙薄?;ㄓ拜p簾幕。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(薄,輕字佳。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">倚闌不用更眠遲。只向黃昏一見最相思。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(黃昏呼應(yīng)斜陽。相思呼應(yīng)上片嬋娟句。斜陽—夢—夜色—眠—黃昏。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">【水龍吟 ·癸丑除夕】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一年似夢光陰,匆匆戰(zhàn)鼓聲中過。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(一年里竟匆匆而過。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">舊愁才剪,新愁又起,傷心還我。凍雨連山,江烽照晚,歸思無那。</span><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(凍雨江烽,遠?;蚴桥f愁。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">任春盤堆玉,邀人臘酒,渾不耐、</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈還禁不起。〉</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(『不耐』重『無那』了。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">通宵坐。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(任,渾兩字精警。春盤臘酒,近。或是新愁。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">◎◎還記</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(追敘。逆入。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">敲冰官舸。鬧蛾兒、揚州燈火。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(昔時歡樂。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">舊游嬉處,而今何在,城闉</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(255, 138, 0);">〈yīn?!?lt;/span><span style="font-size:22px;">空鎖。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)戰(zhàn)鼓。平出。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">小市春聲,深門笑語,</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(今時歡樂。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">不聽猶可。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(呼應(yīng)傷心。)</span><span style="font-size:22px;">怕天涯憶著,梅花有淚,向東風(fēng)墮。</span><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(通宵坐,歸思起。)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">〖年終總結(jié)。莫提起,一提起,全是淚水?!?lt;/span></p>